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Romeo and Juliet are in love in the story because they have passion towards each other they have intimacy and the two have a commitment with each other in there relationship.
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because Juliet faked her death so her and Romeo could be together and Romeo killed himself because he thought Juliet was really dead, and he wanted to be with her so when Juliet woke up and saw that Romeo had killed himself she killed herself too.
Your points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
What do they do? They don't really do a whole lot. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they meet with each other secretly, they are trying to get secretly married, and at the end of the story they kill themselves by each others side.
What you have offered as supports aren't broad enough. How is meeting secretly an expression of love? How is getting married in secret an expression of love-kind of an awkward commitment if no one knows about it. think about what larger supports these things could work towards.What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because he killed himself to be with her somewhere, and got into a fight and killed her cousin because he cared about her to much, and they got married when they saw each other for the first time.
He got in a fight with her cousin because Tybalt killed his friend; it had nothing to do with him at all. How is getting married when they met true love? Brittany Spears had a marriage that lasted a weekend. do you think this is true love? You supports are two narrow. What is a more broad idea these things could explain?What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because they fell in love instantly and whenever they would get separated they would do anything to be with each other again, even if it ment killing them self, because that is how much they loved each other.
Not a valid support-you are saying "they are in love because they fell in love" WHY do you think this? what evidence supports this? Romeo is responsible for them being seperated since he couldn't hold in his temper. Your supports are too narrow. how can you find three supports for "they loved each other so much they were suicidal?" Do you think this is what love is? What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that? DO THEY show those things?
romeo and Juliet are in true love because they kill each other and they try to leave town so they can see each other and they want to change there last name
Your points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they would do anything for each other. For example when Romeo and Juliet can't be together they both kill there self's.Another example is they got married and planned to run away together. Last reason is Romeo killed Juliet's cousin to be with her.
instead of saying "they would do anything for each other" I would say "they express a high level of commitment to one another" them getting married and them killing themselves are both sub-supports of this one idea. Romeo didn't kill Juliets cousin to be with her, he did it cause he got mad at him for killing his friend. It's actually the reason they were seperated.
Your points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
you have one solid point, but the rest are either not true, or the first point restated.
Your point of support is too narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real love because,he wouldn't have went through the trouble and the things he did if he did not love her. she feels the same, she killed herself for him too. They both went against their families to be with each other.
Your points of support are too narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
They are also kind of vague. People go out of the way all the time for people they don't love, because they want to get something out of them. try and go back to your criteria for love to exist, you might want to do some research as well.
thesis: Romeo and Juliet are not experiencing true love because they are to young to know what true love is and if they do have it or not, also 12 hours before he first meet Juliet at the party he was still love sick over some girl that did not like him back.
Good supports! I would make your second support a little more broad, like "They are far too fickle to possess the level of commitment necessary for true love"
Romeo and Juliet are experencing true love because, Romeo and Juliet killed themselves so they could be together, Romeo and Juliet have fallen in love with each other and they just met, and They are both secretly getting married and putting their last names behind them.
no comma after because. also, saying they are in love because they are in love (your second support) isn't a sound argument. It'd be like saying "Ms. Bates is wrong because she was wrong." is getting married in secret a sign they are in love? we usually do things secretly when we are ashamed of them. you need to make your three support points more broad.
Romeo And Juliet are experiencing true love because Romeo has Been showing affection towards Juliet as for Juliet she shows affection towards Romeo. With Romeo's strong feelings towards Juliet causes Romeo to kill him self as she faked being dead as Romeo could not live with out her so he commits suicide as for Juliet she sees Romeo's body as she to commits suicide.
good points, but you only really have two supporting evidences: they express strong feelings of affection, and their emotions are so strong they behave irrationally.
Romeo and Juliet are expiring true love.They love and care for one another and will do anything to protect each other no matter what.They cared enough to kill themselves to be with one another in a better place.
experiencing, not expiring. both your supporting points are the same point "their emotions are so strong they behave irrationally" you need two more supports.
Think about what your criteria you set for love. Do they meet this criteria?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing love because they both did things that they wouldn't normally do for other people, like when Romeo killed Juliet's cousin.
i believe that love is real with romeo and juliet because she would rather die than live with out he and that he would die without her so thats why i think love does exists
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they had connection when they first meet, they have commitment with each other they died for each other, and they have trust with each other they believe they will be with each even though their families don’t like each other.
Thesis: Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love, because they have taken all the risks that could get them into trouble and surpassed them, then in the end they both die from mis communication but when it comes down to it they killed themselves for each other. Even though they didn't know each other for more than a couple days they surpassed all challenges.
Excellent start! strong first point. I'd talk about how their emotions are so strong they make irrational decisions, as you can find more research to back this up rather than suicide.
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because for them to be together they killed themselves just to be with each other, they loved each other very much, & when Romeo first met Juliet he instantly fell in love with her.
Romeo and Juliet think they are in love, but they really aren’t, because Romeo was love sick and then moved straight to Juliet, they kissed as soon as the met because of attraction, and they already say, "I love you," when they don't even know each other that well; While they have feelings that lead to love, they are not in love right now.
good job. rather than say specific evidences, I would go broader. I would say they haven't known each other long enough to develop a realistic sense of commitment.
Romeo an Juliet are experiencing real love because love requires commitment, selflessness, and to take your life for someone you love is considered true love.
Romeo and Juliet are in love because Juliet faked a death to be with Romeo and Romeo actually killed himself because he thought Juliet was dead he wanted to be with her she killed herself because she wanted to be with him too.
Romeo is experiencing true love with Juliet we know this because when she faked her death and he killed his self by drinking poison and when she seen he was dead she stabbed her self with a dagger
Romeo and juliet are not experiencing true love, all of their feelings are just chemical reactions in their bodies to make them feel certian feelings that people classify as "love" .
Revised Thesis- Romeo and Juliet think that they are in love, but Romeo once said he was in love with another girl, also he never committed to her so how will we know or Juliet know if he will commit to her relationship with him, therefore only Juliet is in love not Romeo.
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they meet with each other secretly, they are trying to get secretly married, and at the end of the story they kill themselves by each others side.
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ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love in the story because they have passion towards each other they have intimacy and the two have a commitment with each other in there relationship.
ReplyDeleteI would say "are experiencing true love." This is also a run on.
Deletethose are great supports though!
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because Juliet faked her death so her and Romeo could be together and Romeo killed himself because he thought Juliet was really dead, and he wanted to be with her so when Juliet woke up and saw that Romeo had killed himself she killed herself too.
ReplyDeleteYour points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love. They are willing to do so much to be with each other.
ReplyDeleteNeeds more specific explaining/support and evidence of why they're experiencing true love, short sentence run needs to be longer
DeleteWhat do they do? They don't really do a whole lot. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they meet with each other secretly, they are trying to get secretly married, and at the end of the story they kill themselves by each others side.
ReplyDeleteWhat you have offered as supports aren't broad enough. How is meeting secretly an expression of love? How is getting married in secret an expression of love-kind of an awkward commitment if no one knows about it. think about what larger supports these things could work towards.What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because he killed himself to be with her somewhere, and got into a fight and killed her cousin because he cared about her to much, and they got married when they saw each other for the first time.
ReplyDeleteHe got in a fight with her cousin because Tybalt killed his friend; it had nothing to do with him at all. How is getting married when they met true love? Brittany Spears had a marriage that lasted a weekend. do you think this is true love? You supports are two narrow. What is a more broad idea these things could explain?What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because they fell in love instantly and whenever they would get separated they would do anything to be with each other again, even if it ment killing them self, because that is how much they loved each other.
ReplyDeleteNot a valid support-you are saying "they are in love because they fell in love" WHY do you think this? what evidence supports this? Romeo is responsible for them being seperated since he couldn't hold in his temper. Your supports are too narrow. how can you find three supports for "they loved each other so much they were suicidal?" Do you think this is what love is? What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that? DO THEY show those things?
Deleteromeo and Juliet are in true love because they kill each other and they try to leave town so they can see each other and they want to change there last name
ReplyDeleteYour points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
Deletetoo* narrow
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they would do anything for each other. For example when Romeo and Juliet can't be together they both kill there self's.Another example is they got married and planned to run away together. Last reason is Romeo killed Juliet's cousin to be with her.
ReplyDeleteinstead of saying "they would do anything for each other" I would say "they express a high level of commitment to one another" them getting married and them killing themselves are both sub-supports of this one idea. Romeo didn't kill Juliets cousin to be with her, he did it cause he got mad at him for killing his friend. It's actually the reason they were seperated.
DeleteYour points of support are to narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
you have one solid point, but the rest are either not true, or the first point restated.
too* narrow.
Deleteromeo and juliet are in love, both charcters are willing to give up everything to be with eachother including ther lives.
ReplyDeleteYour point of support is too narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real love because,he wouldn't have went through the trouble and the things he did if he did not love her. she feels the same, she killed herself for him too. They both went against their families to be with each other.
ReplyDeleteYour points of support are too narrow. It's going to be hard to find three supporting Ideas for each of those. What does her faking her death represent? all three supports you have here are all basically the same thing "they are in love because their life was completely tied to the other person to the point they would kill themselves rather than live without the other person. What three things are necessary for love to exist, and how do you think this young couple expressed that?
DeleteThey are also kind of vague. People go out of the way all the time for people they don't love, because they want to get something out of them. try and go back to your criteria for love to exist, you might want to do some research as well.
thesis: Romeo and Juliet are not experiencing true love because they are to young to know what true love is and if they do have it or not, also 12 hours before he first meet Juliet at the party he was still love sick over some girl that did not like him back.
ReplyDeletetoo* young.
DeleteGood supports! I would make your second support a little more broad, like "They are far too fickle to possess the level of commitment necessary for true love"
Romeo and Juliet are experencing true love because, Romeo and Juliet killed themselves so they could be together, Romeo and Juliet have fallen in love with each other and they just met, and They are both secretly getting married and putting their last names behind them.
ReplyDeleteno comma after because. also, saying they are in love because they are in love (your second support) isn't a sound argument. It'd be like saying "Ms. Bates is wrong because she was wrong." is getting married in secret a sign they are in love? we usually do things secretly when we are ashamed of them. you need to make your three support points more broad.
DeleteRomeo And Juliet are experiencing true love because Romeo has Been showing affection towards Juliet as for Juliet she shows affection towards Romeo. With Romeo's strong feelings towards Juliet causes Romeo to kill him self as she faked being dead as Romeo could not live with out her so he commits suicide as for Juliet she sees Romeo's body as she to commits suicide.
ReplyDeletegood points, but you only really have two supporting evidences: they express strong feelings of affection, and their emotions are so strong they behave irrationally.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are expiring true love.They love and care for one another and will do anything to protect each other no matter what.They cared enough to kill themselves to be with one another in a better place.
ReplyDeleteexperiencing, not expiring. both your supporting points are the same point "their emotions are so strong they behave irrationally" you need two more supports.
DeleteThink about what your criteria you set for love. Do they meet this criteria?
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing love because they both did things that they wouldn't normally do for other people, like when Romeo killed Juliet's cousin.
ReplyDeleteRomeo didn't do that for Juliet, he did that for his friend Mercutio. Irrational behavior is just one item of support. you need three.
Deletei believe that love is real with romeo and juliet because she would rather die than live with out he and that he would die without her so thats why i think love does exists
ReplyDeleteThat's only one point of support.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they had connection when they first meet, they have commitment with each other they died for each other, and they have trust with each other they believe they will be with each even though their families don’t like each other.
ReplyDeleteExcellent! You might want to rephrase it though. "They show commitment to one another, they express trust in each other..."
DeleteThesis: Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love, because they have taken all the risks that could get them into trouble and surpassed them, then in the end they both die from mis communication but when it comes down to it they killed themselves for each other. Even though they didn't know each other for more than a couple days they surpassed all challenges.
ReplyDeleteExcellent start! strong first point. I'd talk about how their emotions are so strong they make irrational decisions, as you can find more research to back this up rather than suicide.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because for them to be together they killed themselves just to be with each other, they loved each other very much, & when Romeo first met Juliet he instantly fell in love with her.
ReplyDeleteyou can't say "they love each other" as an explanation for why they love each other. It would be like saying "Ms. Bates is mean because she is mean"
DeleteRomeo and Juliet think they are in love, but they really aren’t, because Romeo was love sick and then moved straight to Juliet, they kissed as soon as the met because of attraction, and they already say, "I love you," when they don't even know each other that well; While they have feelings that lead to love, they are not in love right now.
ReplyDeletegood job. rather than say specific evidences, I would go broader. I would say they haven't known each other long enough to develop a realistic sense of commitment.
DeleteRomeo an Juliet are experiencing real love because love requires commitment, selflessness, and to take your life for someone you love is considered true love.
ReplyDeleteyou need to connect these supports back to your story. say they show commitment, and their actions reflect selflessness, ect.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love because Juliet faked a death to be with Romeo and Romeo actually killed himself because he thought Juliet was dead he wanted to be with her she killed herself because she wanted to be with him too.
ReplyDeletebe broader-how are these things expressing love?
DeleteRomeo is experiencing true love with Juliet we know this because when she faked her death and he killed his self by drinking poison and when she seen he was dead she stabbed her self with a dagger
ReplyDeletewhy are these examples of love? killing yourself is not generally associated with love.
DeleteRomeo and juliet are not experiencing true love, all of their feelings are just chemical reactions in their bodies to make them feel certian feelings that people classify as
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nothing from the story suggests this. You might want to take the approach that brittany did, that they just "think" they are in love
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ReplyDeleteRevised Thesis- Romeo and Juliet think that they are in love, but Romeo once said he was in love with another girl, also he never committed to her so how will we know or Juliet know if he will commit to her relationship with him, therefore only Juliet is in love not Romeo.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they meet with each other secretly, they are trying to get secretly married, and at the end of the story they kill themselves by each others side.
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