CCR
Scholar Start:
please answer the following questions on a separate sheet of paper or google doc:
What tone is expressed by the following sentences:
1.As the rain came down to melt the snowman, I knew our time together was slowly slipping away from me.
A. happy B. Excited
C. scary D. Sad
2. I can't wait to go to the dance tonight! I think everyone is going to be twirling around the dance floor!
A. happy B. Excited
C. scary D. Sad
3.Which sentence is written correctly?
A. Jordan's shoes are new. B. Jordans' shoes are new.
C. Jordans shoes' are new. D. Jordans shoes' are new.
4. Which sentence is written correctly?
A. Walking to the game yesterday, I tripped on the sidewalk.
B. Walked to the game yesterday, I tripping on the sidewalk.
C. As I walked to the game yesterday, I tripped on the sidewalk.
D. Walks to the game yesterday, I trips on a fallen tree branch.
5.Which of the following would be considered a theme?
A. I went to the mall last week.
B. Sometimes the best things in life are free.
C. Iran is a country.
D. The river is green.
ENGLISH
Scholar Start:
Please post your THESIS statement we wrote yesterday in the comments section of the blog. (you have five minutes)
Agenda:
Scholar Start
Glows/Grows
Thesis review
Thesis REVISE
Library.
Remember:
Is it too broad or too narrow of a topic?
It CAN'T use words like "I" "me" "my" "we"
Is it ONE sentence, and a STATEMENT (not a question)?
It CAN'T use words like "All" or "Every"
Here are the slides from the week:
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because he killed himself to be with her somewhere, and got into a fight and killed her cousin because he cared about her to much, and they got married when they almost saw each other.
ReplyDeleteThat is a long sentence and you need more information on your second reason.
DeleteMore info on second reason.Also put some more punctuation in here.You have explained reason one well
DeleteYou need to add more detail of how Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love and if you are using events to support your claim oder the events from the start to the ending events.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet were experiencing true love because their loving actions was acted by feelings and attraction towards romeo and Juliet.
ReplyDeleteyou only have two reasons why. there is post to be three. if you use the one you have now you will only have 4 paragraphs. you need to have Romeo and Juliet were experiencing true love because their loving actions was acted by feelings and attractions towards Romeo and Juliet and another reason why you think that
DeleteIt is a little confusing the way you have it worded.
Deletethis is confusing to read try wording it a little better
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real love because it was love at glance, they were marred the next day, and they would not live without each other.
ReplyDeleteinstead of at glance be more creative or use at first site and they were married the next day use the next day they got marred showing there love for each other delete they would not live without eachother it is sort of a duh input
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are not in love, their attraction to each other is causeing a chemical reaction in there brain to make them think they do
ReplyDeletei think you should do a little more research
DeleteNeeds more detail give more reasons.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are expiring true love.They love and care for one another and will do anything to protect them no matter what.This is why romeo kill her cousin and was trying to arrest him and had to kill him to be with her.They cared enough to kill themselves to be with them in another place
ReplyDeleteyou only have a few grammar errors, read it again and you should notice the problems.
DeleteYou need to go back and check your spelling, punctuation, and capitalization.
DeleteThis isn't one statement, but rather, multiple statements.
DeleteYes, Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because for them to be together they killed themselves just to be with each other, they loved each other very much, & when Romeo first met Juliet he instantly fell in love with her.
ReplyDeleteyou need more support and evidence
DeleteGood description but dont just say yes. Just start with "Romeo and Juliet..." Do not start with Yes.
DeleteThesis Statement:
ReplyDeleteRomeo an Juliet are experiencing real love because love requires commitment, selflessness, and to take your life for someone you love is absolutely true love.
How are they experiencing love by commitment & selflessness? You need to explain it a little better on how they experience commitment and selflessness..
Deletei agree that they are in true love
Deletethesis: have you ever seen the poem romeo and Juliet well if you haven’t then you should read this even if you have saw it romeo and Juliet are in true love because they kill each other and they try to leave town so they can see each other and
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DeleteThis isn't a thesis statement; it is a question. If you are having trouble remember : Romeo and Juliet (are/are not) experiencing true love in "Romeo and Juliet because of _____,_______, and _______.
Deleteromeo and Juliet are experiencing real love because, i don't think he would go through what he did and kill his self unless he really does love her. she must feel the same cause she killed herself for him too, they both went against their families to be with each other.
ReplyDeleteDon't use I. Say "...he wouldn't go through what he did..." instead. Make sure you capitalize
Deletethe I should be capital and it sounds really good it will wake a good esay
Deletego back and check for grammatical and spelling errors but other than that it is an awesome thesis.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet both are experiencing love because they would do anything for each other even if that means kill them self.
ReplyDeleteneed more information for a second reason.
DeleteAdd more evidence to it backing up why you think its true
DeleteRomeo is experiencing true love with Juliet we know this because when she faked her death and he killed his self by drinking poison and when she seen he was dead she stabbed her self with a dagger
ReplyDeleteMake sure you use periods and semicolons.
Deletetrue love does exist, but i do not believe that Romeo an Juliet are experiencing true love because i do not believe that love at first sight exist
ReplyDeleteyou are not supposed to use the words "i" and your opinions
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because they would do anything for each other, even if it ment killing themselves. Also because Romeo instantly feel in love with Juliet.
ReplyDeleteturn the sentence into a run on if you want the last part to count as a thesis an organize it better
Deleteromeo and juliet are in love, reasons is that romeo and Juliet sacrificed there selves so they could be with eachother.
ReplyDeletei guess add more detail but the rest is good
Deletei believe that love is real with romeo and juliet because she would rather die than live with out he and that he would die without her so thats why i think love does exists
ReplyDeletebottom part of sentence doesn't make sense
DeleteThesis: Romeo and Juliet are actually expressing true love because they have very strong emotions for each other and really care about each other. The both feel like they need each other and show true love.
ReplyDeleteI think that yours is good but in your second sentence you need to say they not the because the does not make sens
Deletegood job nothing was wrong that I say.
DeleteYes I do think Romeo and Juliet experienced, true love one reason is They were going to change their last name to be together.The other reason is that that they killed their self to be with each other,This is why I think Romeo and Juliet experienced true love.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all do not put a capital letter in the middle of the sentence, they* and this*. Although, I do agree with what you are saying. Good job!
DeleteYou don't need to use " I think." You also don't need to make "they" and "this" capital.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing love because they both did things that they wouldn't normally do for other people.
ReplyDeleteNeed more information on way you think this.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet do expressed true love because romeo rather change there names to be togther and he rather die then live without her.
ReplyDeleteYou need to change the tense of the word "expressed" to express. And capitalize Romeo.
DeleteYes i do truly believe that true love does exist, the reason why is cause Romeo and Juliet had a very deep close strong connection when they both saw each other they felt very happy this kind of feeling that does not come natural to just some people you have to really care and have a good heart to have true love throughout your life.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and juliet are in love . I think that they did fall in love at first sight.I believe that romeo killed him self over juliet that is true love . Romeo that she was dead and he couldnt live without her that is true love .
ReplyDeleteThis is not one sentence, but rather it is three. So it's not a thesis statement. Also, you use the words "I think." There are several cases where you don't capitalize proper nouns like "Juliet."
DeleteThe point that he would be led to suicide is a strong point, however, it is also the only point of support you offer.
This needs to be only one sentence. Don't use the words " I think" in this sentence.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they meet with each other secretly, they are trying to get secretly married, and at the end of the story they kill themselves by each others side.
ReplyDeletei agree
DeleteGreat use of punctuation.
DeleteThis is good But you need more evidence! And also you have good punctuation.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are not experiencing real true love because, honesty, commitment if it was true romeo would have told Juliet about the other person he loved and he would not have fallen out of love to.
ReplyDeleteA little bit confusing but Romeo needs to be capitalized. What does "he would not have fallen out of love" mean.
DeleteI think you should not have a comma between because and honesty and I think you could re-word your thesis
DeleteBut good job overall.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because Juliet faked her own death to be with Romeo and Romeo killed himself because he thought Juliet was died and he wanted to be with her and after she woke up she killed herself so she can be with him too.
ReplyDeleteYou could make this in to two sentences or you could use another appostery.
DeleteYou spelled "dead" like "died" and you only have one reason. You should have three reasons to make yours better.
DeleteThesis: Romeo and Juliet are in love with each other because they’re secretly getting married, Romeo saw Juliet when she was faking her death and he killed himself then she killed herself when she woke up and he was dead, and they are committed to each other even they just met.
ReplyDeleteit has good detail but its kinda choppy, clean it up a bit. but i like it so far.
Deleteyou could use a comma but I think this is a good thesis
Deletethesis: Romeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they express emotions like, being faithful, being commited, and having a connection.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis is good, but instead of using the world like, you should say for example.
DeleteGood job. Maybe put an example of them being In love.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they would do anything for each other
ReplyDeletegood thesis statement but its kinda boring, explain what emotions they expressed when you said that they would do anything for each other. use better grammar, use thesaurus.com
Deletegood thesis because it has one sentence,but its plain,try a little bit of grammer though.need a period at end of sentence.
Deleteits kind of plain*** and you need three supporting details
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love.I think they did fall in love at first sight.I believe that Romeo killed himself over Juliet that is true love.Romeo thought that she was dead and that he couldn't live without her
ReplyDeleteNeeds a period or punctuation at the end of last sentience. Need to capitalize all the I. Other than that good job.
DeleteYou need to put it all in one sentence. You need a period at the end of the last sentence. Other then that, your thesis statement is pretty good. Good job with getting good examples
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they had connection we they first meet, they have commitment with each other they died for each other, and they have trust with each other they believe they will be with each even though their families don’t like each other.
ReplyDeletethey had connection when . when they first met,
Deletegrammer punctuation error
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ReplyDeleteromeo and juilet are in true love because juilet faked a death to be with romeo and romeo accually killed himself because he thought juilet was dead and he wanted to be with her and after she killed herselve to be with him too
ReplyDeleteYou need to capitalize Romeo and Juliet. Also when you say "romeo and juliet are in true love......." You need to say, "Romeo and Juliet are in love because....." You need to capitalize Juliet when you use her name. Same with Romeo. Also, I think you meant to put actually instead of accually. When you say "he wanted to be with her and after she killed herselve to be with him too." You need to say, "he wanted to be with her and after she found him she killed herself to be with him too." Good job other than that.
DeleteThe names need to capitalized. You need commas where the ands are expect for the last and. Your last example needs to be worded different. Like you could say after she killed herself to be with Romeo.
DeleteThesis- Both of the characters Romeo and Juliet think that they are in love but it may not be true love. Therefore Romeo and Juliet are not experiencing true true love because, Romeo doesn’t know what committing means.
ReplyDeletehow do you know that they are not inlove and how do you know that he is not knowing what commitment means?
Deleteyou should change think into think's
Deleteromeo and juliet are not in love because before he meet juliet he was in love with another girl.
ReplyDeleteYou need to have Romeo and Juliet capitalized. Also when you say "he meet juliet he was in love with another girl." You need to have "he met Juliet; he was in love with another girl." Or you could put "he met Juliet while he was in love with Juliet. You sentence is a run on that is why I say this. Other than your capitalization and punctuation it is a really good thesis. It is a good thesis because it does not use all or every. I does not want the reader to be like "Who care!!" So good job Rhonda, just try and work on your capitalization. :)
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love in the story because they have passion towards each other they have intimacy and the two have a commitment with each other in there relationship.
ReplyDeleteIt looks like you only have two main idears
DeleteRomeo and juliet are in love because they have a special bond and they are compasinton for each other.Romeo killed himself because he loved her so much.
ReplyDeleteGood thesis statement but could use more detail in your last pice of evidence
Deleteit could use some more detail but it is still good
Deletethesis: Romeo and Juliet are not experiencing true love because they are to young to know true love and 12 hours before he was still love sick over some girl.
ReplyDeleteGood ideas maybe use some more information
Deletethey are to young needs to be, They are too young
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ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they are whiling to give up there old love life to join each other, they also were whiling to die for each other, they also stated that they want to run away and live happy with each other.
ReplyDeleteyou need to fix the run on
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DeleteCheck your spelling, and you seem to be repetitive and only have one piece of evidence. Good overall meaning but I would go back and look at it.
DeleteNevermind, fix whiling to willing
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing actual true love because they seem to not stop thinking of one another and are strongly attached, they have such diverse communication when speaking to each other in what seems to be a true manor, and they find the need to separate everybody else just to be together.
ReplyDeleteManor needs to be manner which means way or politeness, But manor means like large home.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real true love because Juliet faked her own death because she loved Romeo and wanted to be with him and when Romeo thought that Juliet was truly dead he drank poison and kissed Juliet one last time and then he died after Juliet woke up and found Romeo dead she couldn't stand to be without him so she took his dagger and stabbed herself in the chest.
ReplyDeleteGood job. You had very strong opinion. You need to use commas and periods in you're sentences,
Deleteromeo and juliet are experiencing true love becuase they are planning on getting married and have died together and have went two a different place.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet should be capitalized and your thesis needs more detail
DeleteYou need to capitalize Romeo and Juliet you also need some more detail
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because Juliet faked her death so her and Romeo could be together and Romeo killed himself because he thought Juliet was really dead and he wanted to be with her so when Juliet woke up and saw that Romeo had killed himself she killed herself too.
ReplyDeletei agree that what i said that true love.
Deletethis is great. Just try to find a different way besides saying "he" or "she" so much. You also need to add a comma between (dead) and (and)
DeleteRomeo and Juliet think they are in love, but they really aren’t. Evidence shows that Romeo was love sick and then moved straight to Juliet, they kissed as soon as the met because of attraction, and they already say, "I love you," when they don't even know each other that well. While they have feelings that lead to love, they are not in love right now.
ReplyDeleteDon't say "Evidence Shows"
Deletethey think they are in love but they are not
ReplyDeleteYou don't have reasoning. Who is they? You don't have evidence.
DeleteYou need to check your spelling too.
DeleteNeeds three supporting details to back up statement. Who's is they? Who are you addressing?
DeleteCapitolize the beginnign of a sentence, this is not really an adequate sentence. Work on evidence and use Ms. Bates format that's on the boardd and try to find more reasponing try and go back to the story and gather information. Try to state who the people are as well an unknown reader wouldn't know who "they" were and could get confused. I would try again.
DeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love because they had love at first sight and also because they talked about getting married and died together.
ReplyDeleteGood explanation however, explain more with details.
DeleteYou need to include more information, one statement isn't enough.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love, because they have taken all the risks that could get them into trouble and surpassed them, then in the end they both die from mis communication but when it comes down to it they killed themselves for each other. Even though they didn't know each other for more than a couple days they surpassed all challenges.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love.They are in love because they care for each other.They would do anything to be with each other,Thats why they killed themselves to be with each other.
ReplyDeleteCombine some of your sentences, they are choppy. Work on capitalism and punctuation as well.
DeleteRomeo has experiences the psychological aspect of true love because he is believing that they (Romeo and Juliet) are in love.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing real, true love because they are expressing emotions for example, being faithful, being committed, and having a connection.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are not in love,
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are not in love because
before Romeo met Juliet, Romeo was "in love"
with another girl.
Romeo and Juliet are experiencing true love, it’s true love because Juliet faked her own death to be with Romeo. So Romeo killed himself because he thought Juliet was dead and he wanted to be with her so when she woke up she killed herself because she can be with him too.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are not experiencing true love because, honesty and commitment if Romeo was in true love he would have told Juliet about the other person he loved and he would not have fallen out of love with that other person.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are in love because they were in love at first sight. Romeo was in love before Juliet which makes you think is he just playing her? I say that its true love because when Romeo heard Juliet was dead he came there to see her killed his self when Juliet woke she killed her self as well.
ReplyDeleteRomeo and Juliet are experiencing true love between them they had a very deep close strong love connection between each other, the reason why is cause they took very high risks to be together and also fought for their love and conquered the battles of evil who was against them ,Romeo and Juliet also died for each other cause they killed their selves for one another to be together in a place they may call heaven in their eyes cause they saw something very deep and special inside each other.
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